Rhetorical Analysis
Rhetorical Analysis
i want a propositional writer to fix my essay
Hassin Atahifh
Mr. Sissom
EN140-02
12 November 2017
In this work by Jeremy Adam Smith, the author’s thesis statement is that humans have some level of fear and stereotype immigrants based on our native development over time and genetic composition. This composition and development has been found to be linked with our mores and daily interaction with the physical and social environment.
The indicators illustrated in this work comes from categorization, systematic observations, opinions of experts, and news articles from dailies, the differences in power between immigrants and native-born as well as xenophobia that were used as evidence in this work by Smith. He became a force with which to reckon when he cited the case of Rodrigo and made a lot of people realize that there are more children who are suffering the same fate like Rodrigo.
The writer was looking at the plight of immigrants, the unnecessary fear and injustice suffered in the hands of their host communities. This intention of the writer was done in a way that tries to conceptualize the belief that not all immigrants are nuisances to their host communities and some of them contribute to the wealth of the communities in which they found themselves. This point that Smith states is quite founded; for example, most of the menial jobs and hazardous work are performed by immigrants.
Thus, the fundamental reason why America became a force to reckon with is because it opens its border to different cultures and races which gives it a blend of ideas (Land of the Free). Smith also tries to make us understand that many native-born Americans are seeing immigrants as people who come to the States to take the limited jobs meant for them which is why some of these native- born Americans look at them with fear and repulsion and this stereotype is one of the most important singular reason that motivate immigrants to be placed in certain dichotomies.
For example, many people think all the Mexicans that live legally and illegally in the US are drug peddlers and gangsters while the Africans most especially Nigerians are fraudsters irrespective even though they do not fit into the criteria but they are labeled that way.
Jeremy Adam Smith was trying to all Americans and the world in general. Looking at the article systematically and examining it in the light of recent happening, one will know that the problem of immigration is not related to the Americans alone but to the world at large. Although the essay was intended to point our attention to the plight of immigrants in America, “tThe fear of immigrants” is ultimately ineffective because it highlighted only the plight of the Mexican immigrants in the State.
The essence of me saying this is because Jeremy dwells so much on the plight of the Mexicans but are theythey are not the only immigrants in the state;, we all know that there are other nationals in the state mostly of Asian and African stock, so why are Mexicans only mentioned?. Although one error in reasoning which I find in his arguments or essay is that he gives sufficient amounts of sources (which I can termed liberal) and data for the side of the argument he seemed to support.
H, he didn’t provide sufficient, and or if I might use the term he didn’t do justice to the information that support the contrary view. Another point posited by the author I do not agree with is the position where he subscribe that having a fear of immigrants is caused by evolution that are deep sited in our genetics he used the term “molecular.”
Psychologists have found out that most of our behavior apart from the vegetative ones of sucking or feeding are learned which implies that I believe that the fear of certain group of people are learned but I strongly agree that if fear can be learned then it can be reversed. Another reason why I am of the view that these work was not too effective is because Smith analogies are quite ambiguous and will not be fully understood when probably reliable person who is educated examine it, and to be accurate about the problem of stereotyping is more common among the uneducated American.
Smith’s article should be framed in such a way that an average American can read and understand without stress. Another thing to note in this work which is very important is that Jeremy didn’t demonstrate a good understanding of the immigrant issue by taking up strong intellectual opinion and disproving it, most of the time he developed a contrary claim and he just leave the claim unattended to. Comment by WritingCenter, GA:
Is this the quote or did you accidentally misquote? I would just double check my source. OR is this an official term used in sources? Comment by WritingCenter, GA: ? Comment by WritingCenter, GA: In this sentence as well as the following sentences, you give your personal opinion, which I believe your prompt indicates is nonessential to the paper. Should you keep this information and not rephrase, rephrase the content, or omit it completely?
The author is writing this article in the wake of the terrorist attacks during the past few years in places like Paris, Baghdad, Africa, Beirut etc. the political responses of to this attack have revealed a fissure that has been embed in the American life which is one defined by fear. This brand of fear has led to fear- based reasoning, which has led to a distortion in the public perception of immigrants;, immigrants are now viewed as threat to the limited resources.
The author appeals (ethos) by trying to stimulate the audience to form a mental picture of immigrants by making the readers relate to immigrants as not just migrants but as people with families or simply human. For instance, he uses the case of Rodrigo He also says, “tThere are ways to conceptualize immigration, not on a deficit model, but as bringing in skills and resources that grow the economy, potentially growing the pool of what goes around.”
The author also appeal (logos) to me by making me see reasons why we should not consider this immigrants as nuisance or deficit but as contributors to the Economic development of the state which he buttress by saying that “people with wealth and at the top of the hierarchies aren’t thinking as carefully about what other individuals can offer and contribute and this leads them to embrace stereotype.”
The author is quite skillful in appealing to the emotional part of me or pathos by making me realized that these immigrants are humans like me and they also bleed and go through the pain of rejection like me. He did this by citing the story of Rodrigo. Comment by WritingCenter, GA: Should you cite this source?
The thesis has its flaws and it strong point which are quite convincing to a minimum extent but on a larger scale most intellectual will find it difficult to agree to what Jeremy Adam Smith is projecting because justice (more information or data) was not provided to the opposite side of the argument.
Work Cited
Smith, Jeremy. “Our Fear of Immigrants.” The Norton Field Guide to Writing with Readings. Edited by Richard Bullock and Maureen Daly Goggn, Norton, 2016, pp. 750-757.
Rhetorical Analysis Prompt and Rubric
Length: 3-5 full pages. Your “Works Cited” page does not count. Due dates: First draft due by Wednesday September 13 @ 11:55 PM (Online Peer Review) Second draft due Friday September 22 @ 11:55 PM All optional drafts of all essays are due by December 8 @ 11:55 PM. Select and closely read one of the following essays from your textbook:
“Is Google Making Us Stupid?” by Nicholas Carr; page 735 “Our Fear of Immigrants” by Jeremy Adam Smith; page 750 “Anti-Intellectualism: Why We Hate the Smart Kids” by Grant Penrod; page 759 After selecting one, please follow the guidelines below, and articulate your argument of the essay’s effectiveness. Use the following questions for analyzing an argument on pages 115-116 in your textbook as a guide:
• What is the claim? What is the main point the writer is trying to make? How does the author qualify his/her thesis?
• What support does the writer offer for the claim? What reasons are used to support the claim? What evidence does author use to back up those reasons (e.g., anecdotes, data, statistics, etc.)? Are the reasons and evidence convincing?
• How does the author appeal to the audience? These discussions will require you to demonstrate your knowledge of the rhetorical appeals we discussed in class.
o pathos – appeal to emotion o ethos – appeal to credibility o logos – appeal to logic o kairos/“kairotic moment” – “of the time;” what motivated the author to write
the argument at the time? • Is the argument balanced? Does the author address potential counterarguments? If so,
how? Does he/she respond to them reasonably and with respect, or is he/she dismissive of them?
Be sure to properly cite your article, both in-text and on a “Works Cited” page. See the Purdue OWL resource at the top of our Moodle page and/or pages 496-548 of your textbook for MLA rules/guidelines. Getting Started: Consider the following organization:
Paragraph One: Summary Begin your essay with an effective, brief summary of the source text. The key here is brevity. Paragraph Two: Introduction of Purpose, Audience, Effectiveness of Source
Follow your summary paragraph with another brief paragraph that transitions from your summary to your thesis and rhetorical analysis. This paragraph should introduce two key components: the author’s intended purpose and intended audience. Most importantly, this paragraph must end with a well-developed thesis statement arguing the effectiveness or ineffectiveness of the source author’s argument. Your thesis should clearly state whether the source essay was effective or ineffective (use the “because clause”) and should be the last sentence of your second paragraph. Here are a few models:
Although [author]’s essay was intended to [purpose of essay], “[title of essay]” is ultimately ineffective because [forecast major points of your analysis (reasons for ineffectiveness)]. [Author’s] essay was intended to [purpose of essay] and is ultimately effective because [forecast major points of your analysis (reasons for effectiveness)].
Body Paragraphs While creating your body and conclusion paragraphs please be sure to
• analyze the source’s argument using terms/concepts from the course outlined above
• use strong essay-level and paragraph-level organization, and adhere to a logical, focused structure
• show competence with the fundamentals of sentence-level writing • avoid simply summarizing the article (this will result in a low grade) • use the source (summary, paraphrase, and/or direct quotation) to support your
claims regarding the argument’s effectiveness • avoid expanding on the topic
Conclusion Simply revisit/review your thesis and your stance regarding the effectiveness of the argument. Again, brevity is key here.
IMPORTANT NOTE: Your life experiences, your personal stance on the issue, and your enjoyment of the essay are nonessential to this assignment and should not be included. Your goal here is to dissect the source and discuss its effectiveness based on the elements of an argument we learned in class. Use the questions listed in your textbook and on this prompt as a guide, and STAY FOCUSED.
Rubric for Rhetorical Analysis
Characteristics of the A Paper
• The analysis never strays from its purpose. • The content and tone are appropriate and effective for a general audience. • The writer’s analysis is skillfully supported with evidence and examples, while also
expertly distinguishing any necessary qualifications. • The paper follows the pre-determined organization outlined in the essay prompt. • The article is cited accurately and correctly, both in-text and on the works cited page. • The paper is logically organized without feeling mechanical or formulaic. • Sentences are varied in length and structure, according to the author’s purpose and
emphasis. • Mechanically, the paper is correct except for very few excusable errors of inadvertence
and violations of extremely technical rules.
Characteristics of the B Paper • The analysis may not always affect the audience as the writer expects it to, but it is
focused and interesting. • The content and tone are appropriate for a general audience. • The writer’s analysis is supported with evidence and examples, while also distinguishing
necessary qualifications. • The paper follows the pre-determined organization outlined in the essay prompt with only
minor lapses in accuracy and/or correctness. • The article is cited, both in-text and on the works cited page, with only minor lapses in
accuracy and/or correctness. • The paper is logically organized without feeling mechanical or formulaic, but transitions
are sometimes strained. • Sentences are usually varied in length and structure to suit the author’s purpose and
emphasis. • Mechanically, the paper is generally correct except for some problems with complex
grammar and punctuation conventions.
Characteristics of the C Paper • The purpose of the analysis is not always clear. • For the most part, the content and tone are appropriate for a general audience. • The writer’s analysis is mostly supported with evidence and examples, while also
distinguishing some necessary qualifications. • Writer attempts to follow the prompt guidelines, but there are inconsistencies with
accuracy and/or correctness. • Writer attempts to cite the article, both in-text and on the works cited page, but there are
inconsistencies with accuracy and/or correctness. • The paper is organized through mechanical or formulaic methods; transitions are
sometimes strained or missing. • Even though there are few errors in sentence structure, sentences are not varied in length
and structure.
• The essay contains a few major errors, and there are several mistakes in spelling, grammar, and punctuation.
Characteristics of the D Paper
• Only in a few places does the analysis find its purpose; mostly, the paper is an unfocused exercise.
• At times, the content and tone are inappropriate for a general audience. • The writer’s analysis is inconsistently supported with evidence and examples and may or
may not distinguish necessary qualifications. • Writer doesn’t follow the prompt guidelines very well, and there are consistent problems
with accuracy and/or correctness. • Writer infrequently attempts to cite the article, both in-text and on the works cited page,
and there are consistent problems with accuracy and/or correctness. • Some principle of organization is apparent, but it is not successfully followed. • Errors in sentence structure are frequent enough to distract the reader. • The essay contains several major errors, and there are frequent and/or consistent mistakes
in spelling, grammar, and punctuation.
Characteristics of the F Paper • The analysis has no purpose and lacks focus. • The content and tone are inappropriate for a general audience. • The writer’s analysis is not supported with evidence and examples and does not
distinguish any necessary qualifications. • Writer makes no attempt to follow the guidelines issued in the prompt. • Writer makes no attempt to cite the article. • There is no apparent organization. • Errors in sentence structure are distracting to the reader and make it difficult to follow the
writer’s points. • Some errors include failure to understand the basic grammar of the sentence. Simple
words are frequently misspelled.
