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Research Writing EXD 330-110

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Module 1 Overview  

Research – it’s not a word that most of us like. Add “Research Paper” and many people break out in a cold sweat. Never fear! This course will cover the steps for writing a research paper ONE at a time. In Module 1, we will start by finding one current controversial article. By Module 4, an entire research paper will come together.  Let’s call it an “Argumentative Synthesis” so no one breaks out in hives!

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 Module 1 Objectives

Upon completion of this module, you will be able to:

· Demonstrate the ability to use The University of Alabama’s Scout search engine to find current, controversial sources.

· Determine if the sources found are reliable and credible.

· Identify the importance of highlighting and annotating possible sources.

· Understand the importance of asking questions about your sources to establish credibility

· Understand how to create an annotated bibliography.

· Understand how to summarize and evaluate an article.

Module 1 Readings

*Example of MLA formatting used for first page of all writing assignments found on page 59 and 465.

Read pages 357-375 & 375-389 – under Researching – green R

Read pages 71-75 – under Academic Writing – yellow A

Watch all video tutorials to learn how to use Scout and proper researching techniques.

Module 1 Assignment 1: Research using Scout

For this assignment, you will use the readings and videos to find your first current, controversial source. This assignment is worth 10 points.




1. Review the videos and the tutorials on how to use the University of Alabama’s Scout search engine.

2. Choose a current, controversial topic.

3. Use Scout to locate one interesting article on your research topic. (The article should be in PDF format if possible and at least 2-5 pages in length. Also try to find articles published within the last six months if possible. You can stretch to a year if you must.)

4. Use the Email function in Scout to email the article to yourself. You should also e-mail the Works Cited entry. (Click on Cite at the top right of the screen. Choose MLA and the entry will come up.)

5. Use the Internet to locate information on the author of the article and the publication. It’s always good to know if the author or journal has a bias.

6. Submit the PDF of your article by clicking on the Module 1 Assignment 1 title above and using the Assignment Submission tool to attach your file.

Module 1 Assignment 2: Evaluating the source

For this assignment you will be using the article you selected in the first assignment and your text to answer questions. This assignment is worth 10 points.





1. Create a document in a word processing program (e.g. Microsoft Word). As a UA student, you can download Microsoft 365 free of charge at the UA OIT website. You will need your CWID.

2. Copy the ten questions from p. 382 “Evaluating all sources” and then paste them into the Word document.

3. Answer each question as it relates to the article you found in Assignment 1.

4. Save the document as m1a2_yourname.

5. Submit your completed document by clicking on the Module 1 Assignment 2 title above and using the Assignment Submission tool to attach your file.

Module 1 Assignment 3: Highlight and Annotate

Review pages 71 -75. For this assignment, you will need to highlight and annotate your article. Every time you highlight a word or section, stop and explain why. You can highlight and annotate in a pdf file or in a Word file.  This assignment is worth 10 points.




1. Save the document as m1a3_yourname.

2. Submit your completed document by clicking on the Module 1 Assignment 3 title above and using the Assignment Submission tool to attach your file.

Module 1 Assignment 4: Annotated Bibliography

Review pages 369-389. For this assignment, you will start an annotated bibliography. See example on p. 387. Make sure to include the entry, a summary and an evaluation. Center Annotated Bibliography at the top of the page. Make sure to use double spacing and 12 point font in Times New Roman.                                              This assignment is worth 30 points.

Note: Your bibliographic entry will be done for you by UA Scout, but if you want to know why different parts are put in a particular order, you can look at pages 422-461 for a complete breakdown of all kinds of entries. A bibliography is a list of ALL sources consulted; a Works Cited is a list of only the sources used in a particular paper. Since we are using all five sources, the same sources will be listed for both of these assignments.




1. Save the document as m1a4_yourname.

2. Submit your completed document by clicking on the Module 1 Assignment 4 title above and using the Assignment Submission tool to attach your file.

Module 1 = 60 points

Module 2 Overview

After reading an article, if you can turn to a friend and summarize it, then you obviously understood what you read. Moreover, if you can explain what made the article effective, you can also decide if the article is relevant and helpful to your research. In this module, you will understand the importance of being able to summarize, analyze and use the writing process.

Module 2 Objectives

Upon completion of Module 2, you will be able to:

· Review the importance of highlighting and annotating what you read.

· Review the importance of asking questions about your sources to establish credibility.

· Review the importance of being able to summarize what you read.

· Understand how to create a written analysis of an article.

· Identify the importance of using the writing process which includes: creating a working thesis and an organizational plan, highlighting and annotating a rough draft version, and revising a final draft.

Module 2 Readings

Review pages 71-77 yellow tab A and pages 357-389 green tab R.  

Read pages 75-88 yellow tab A.

Module 2 Assignment 1: Research – two more articles

For this assignment you will continue to use Scout. This time you will locate two additional articles on the same topic you selected in Module 1. This assignment is worth 20 points. (10 points per article)





1. Use Scout to locate two additional articles (PDF format) (approximately 2-5 pages each) on your research topic. 

2. Highlight and annotate the articles as you did in Module 1 Assignment 4 and save the articles as m2article1_yourname and m2article2_yourname.

3. Use the Internet to locate additional information about the author(s) and publication. Consider the “Evaluating all sources” questions, but they are not required for submission.

4. Submit your completed assignment by clicking on the Module 2 Assignment 1 title above and attaching the following using the Assignment Submission tool:

· Article 1 highlighted and annotated

· Article 2 highlighted and annotated

Module 2 Assignment 2: Add to Annotated Bibliography

Add the two new articles to your Annotated Bibliography: Review 369-389. Make sure the summaries are comprehensive. This assignment is worth 40 points.




1. Save the document as m2a2_yourname.

2. Submit your completed document by clicking on the Module 2 Assignment 2 title above and using the Assignment Submission tool to attach your file.

Module 2 Assignment 3: Analysis

Review pages 78-83 and write an analysis of ONE of your two new articles. Remember and analysis is different from a summary. You should include brief summary, but then then main focus is to decide if the article is effective. Is this a good article? This assignment is broken up into three sections, so I can make sure you are analyzing the article. Submit each section individually. Wait for feedback and a grade on one section before moving to the next section. The writing process is important.

Create as working thesis and then create an organizational plan for your paragraphs. See page 83. 10 pts




1. Save the document as m2a3_yourname.

2. Submit your completed document by clicking on the Module 2 Assignment 2 title above and using the Assignment Submission tool to attach your file.

Module 2 Assignment 4: Analysis Rough Draft

Create a rough draft of your analysis and then answer the seven questions found on page 83 under REVISE. Highlight and annotate your rough draft. Ask questions if you are unsure of how something should be done. Wait for feedback. 20 pts.




1. Save the document as m2a4_yourname.

2. Submit your completed document by clicking on the Module 2 Assignment 4 title above and using the Assignment Submission tool to attach your file.

Module 2 Assignment 5: Analysis Final Draft

Using the instructor’s comments, revise your rough draft and create a final draft of your analysis. Use pages 80-81 as a model. Your analysis should be two to three pages long. Use MLA format: Times New Roman 12 point font, double spacing, a header with your last name and the page number, a centered title and a Works Cited page with the entry for the article. 70 pts.



1. Save the document as m2a5_yourname.

2. Submit your completed document by clicking on the Module 2 Assignment 5 title above and using the Assignment Submission tool to attach your file.

E-mail me if you have questions.

Module 2 = 160 points

Module 3 Overview

I am sure you can tell someone all about one published article that you read. However, how would you explain what you found in five published articles? You would be forced to write down information to keep them all straight. What if you wanted to use these five or six articles to discuss why Americans (should or should not) be allowed to have as many guns as they want? What you learn in Module 3 keeps you from plagiarizing. Every time you use information from a published source (print or web) you must give credit to the source. Plagiarism is a big “no – no.” Thank you Module 3!

Module 3 Objectives

Upon completion of this module, you will be able to:

· Review the importance of highlighting and annotating what you read to help with critical reading.

· Review the importance of asking questions about your sources to establish credibility.

· Identify strategies to avoid plagiarism.

· Understand the importance of using proper methods to quote and paraphrase information.

· Describe how to use sources and properly document those sources using parenthetical citations.

· Understand how to always give credit to the published source of information used.

· Demonstrate how to create a Works Cited list for your paper.

Module 3 Readings

Read pages 399-412 MLA white tab: Citing sources; avoiding plagiarism and pages 412-422 MLA white tab: Documenting sources. Also use pages 422-464 as a reference for all the different kinds of Works Cited entries. However, since we have been working on an annotated bibliography, you will have your Works Cited entries in the correct format.

The MLA white tabbed section contains the most important pages for this class.

Module 3 Assignment 1: Research – two more articles

For this assignment you will continue to use Scout. Locate two additional articles on the same topic you selected in Module 1 and 2. This assignment is worth 20 points. (10 points per article)





1. Use Scout to locate two additional articles (PDF format) (approximately 2-5 pages each) on your research topic. Highlight and annotate the articles as you did in Module 2 and save the articles as m3article1_yourname and m3article2_yourname.

2. Use the Internet to locate additional information about the author(s) and publication. Consider the “Evaluating all sources” questions, but they are not required for submission.

3. Submit your completed assignment by clicking on the Module 3 Assignment 1 title above and attaching the following using the Assignment Submission tool:

· Article 1 highlighted and annotated

· Article 2 highlighted and annotated

Module 3 Assignment 2: Add to Annotated Bibliography

Add the two new articles to your Annotated Bibliography: Review 369-389. Make sure the summaries are comprehensive. This assignment is worth 40 points.




1. Save the document as m2a2_yourname.

2. Submit your completed document by clicking on the Module 2 Assignment 2 title above and using the Assignment Submission tool to attach your file.

Module 3 Assignment 3: Summarizing and giving credit to the source

Review pages 400-403 & 412. Find a long section of information in each of your new articles. Type the original section, and then type a summarized version. *Remember that a summary should be a condensed version, so the summary will be shorter than the original. Use an in-text citation at the end of the summary to give credit to the source. Use an MLA heading and MLA formatting. 10 pts.




1. Save the document as m3a3_yourname.

2. Submit your completed document by clicking on the Module 3 Assignment 3 title above and using the Assignment Submission tool to attach your file.

Module 3 Assignment 4: Paraphrasing and giving credit to the source

Review pages 400-403 & 412. Find two interesting section of information in each of your new articles. Type the original section, and then type a paraphrased version. *Remember that paraphrased information is about the same length as the original. Use an in-text citation at the end to give credit to the source. Use an MLA heading and MLA formatting. 10 pts.




1. Save the document as m3a4_yourname.

2. Submit your completed document by clicking on the Module 3 Assignment 4 title above and using the Assignment Submission tool to attach your file.

Module 3 Assignment 5: Quoting and giving credit to the source

Review pages 403-412. Find five interesting facts from each of your two new articles. (You probably highlighted many facts when you were reading the articles.) Type these ten facts as direct quotations from your articles. Use the integration methods, such as signal phrases, discussed in your book – paying close attention to page 406. Use an in-text citation at the end of each quotation to give credit to the source. Use an MLA heading and MLA formatting. 20 pts.




1. Save the document as m3a5_yourname.

2. Submit your completed document by clicking on the Module 3 Assignment 5 title above and using the Assignment Submission tool to attach your file.

Module 3 = 100 points

Module 4 Overview

You now have five good articles that you have thoroughly researched. It’s time to decide on a thesis and use your articles to present an argumentative synthesis. You have all the tools you need. It’s time to put it all together.

Module 4 Objectives

Upon completion of this module, you will be able to:

· Review the importance of highlighting and annotating a rough draft version.

· Identify the basic elements of writing an argumentative synthesis.

· Create an argumentative synthesis.

Module 4 Readings

Read pages 7-20 and pages 30-60 yellow tab C                                                                                                

Read pages 89-113 yellow tab A and pages 464-470 white tab MLA.

Module 4 Assignment 1: Working thesis – Argumentative Synthesis.

Review pages 9-12 and write a working thesis for your Argumentative Essay. 5 points




1. Save the document as m4a1_yourname.

2. Submit your completed document by clicking on the Module 4 Assignment 1 title above and using the Assignment Submission tool to attach your file.

Module 4 Assignment 2: Argument Points

Come up with six to eight arguments to support your thesis. Type them considering the order in which they should be presented. Type them in order and then answer the first three questions on page 105 under “Anticipating and countering opposing arguments.”  20 points




1. Save the document as m4a2_yourname.

2. Submit your completed document by clicking on the Module 4 Assignment 2 title above and using the Assignment Submission tool to attach your file.

Module 4 Assignment 3: Rough Draft of Argumentative Synthesis

Review pages 89-111. Create a rough draft of your Argumentative Synthesis. When you complete your rough draft, go back and highlight and annotate it with your own comments and questions. I will answer all questions in my grading comments. 40 points

Paper Requirements: 5-8 pages in length including the Works Cited page. Double spaced, Times new Roman 12 point font, MLA formatting including the heading and header, and must integrate at least one summarized section, seven paraphrased sections, and five factual quotations.




1. Save the document as m4a3_yourname.

2. Submit your completed document by clicking on the Module 4 Assignment 3 title above and using the Assignment Submission tool to attach your file.

Module 4 Assignment 4: Works Cited

Review page 470. Type a Works Cited list. This should be easy since you have been keeping an Annotated Bibliography. Follow the model. Pay attention to spacing and indentions. Make sure to alphabetize the entries by the first listed author’s last name. 15 points   E-mail me if you have questions.




1. Save the document as m4a4_yourname.

2. Submit your completed document by clicking on the Module 4 Assignment 4 title above and using the Assignment Submission tool to attach your file.

Wait until you read the comments on this rough draft before you submit the final draft.

Module 4 Assignment 5: Argumentative Synthesis – Final Draft

Revise your essay based on the feedback and comments made on the rough draft. Proofread and edit.  Submit a polished version. 100 points




1. Save the document as m4a5_yourname.

2. Submit your completed document by clicking on the Module 4 Assignment 5 title above and using the Assignment Submission tool to attach your file.

Writing With sources

r researching R1 Thinking like a researcher;

gathering sources R2 Managing information;

taking notes responsibly R3 Evaluating sources

MLA Papers MLA-1 Supporting a thesis MLA-2 Citing sources;

avoiding plagiarism MLA-3 Integrating sources MLA-4 Documenting sources MLA-5 Manuscript format;

sample research paper

APA and cMs Papers (Coverage parallels MLA’s)



i index Multilingual menu Revision symbols Detailed menu How to use this book

Writing correctLy

g grammatical sentences G1 Subject-verb agreement G2 Verb forms, tenses, and moods G3 Pronouns G4 Adjectives and adverbs G5 Sentence fragments G6 Run-on sentences

M Multilingual Writers and esL challenges

M1 Verbs M2 Articles M3 Sentence structure M4 Using adjectives M5 Prepositions and idiomatic

expressions M6 Paraphrasing sources effectively

P Punctuation and Mechanics

P1 The comma P2 Unnecessary commas P3 The semicolon and the colon P4 The apostrophe P5 Quotation marks P6 Other punctuation marks P7 Spelling and hyphenation P8 Capitalization P9 Abbreviations and numbers P10 Italics

B Basic grammar B1 Parts of speech B2 Sentence patterns B3 Subordinate word groups B4 Sentence types

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A Reference

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Nancy Sommers Harvard University

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Kimberli Huster Robert Morris University

A Reference

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Text acknowledgments and copyrights appear below. Art acknowledgments and copyrights appear on the same page as the selections they cover; these acknowledgments and copyrights constitute an extension of the copyright page. It is a violation of the law to reproduce these selections by any means whatsoever without the written permission of the copyright holder.

Stephen J. Gould, excerpt from “Were Dinosaurs Dumb?” from Natural History, 87(5): 9–16. Reprinted by permission of Rhonda R. Shearer.

Dorling Kindersly, excerpt from “Encyclopedia of Fishing.” Copyright © Dorling Kindersley Limited, 1994. Reprinted by permission of Penguin Group, Ltd.

Anne and Jack Rudloe, excerpt from “Electric Warfare: The Fish That Kills with Thunderbolts,” from Smithsonian 24(5): 95–105. Reprinted by permission.

Betsy Taylor, “Big Box Stores Are Bad for Main Street,” from CQ Researcher, (November 1999). Copyright © 1999 by CQ Press, a division of Sage Publications. Reprinted with permission.

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Preface for instructors

Dear Colleagues: As college teachers, we have a far-reaching mission. We prepare

students to write for different purposes, for different audiences, and in different genres and media. We show students how to read critically and write effectively, preparing them to join ongoing research conversations as contributors (not just as consumers) of ideas. What we teach is at the very core of students’ college experience. For academic success, no skill is more critical than effective writing.

This new edition of A Writer’s Reference grows out of my thirty years as a writing teacher and from many conversations with college faculty across disciplines. In all these conversations, I hear a similar theme: Writing is the core of a student’s success, no matter the field of study. Teachers speak about ambitious assignments to teach students how to think and write clearly and precisely, how to interpret evidence and data, and how to enter research conversations with the requisite skills to manage information and avoid plagiarism. And faculty across disciplines all speak about the need for their students to have a reliable handbook to help them understand the expectations of college writing assignments and succeed as writers.

I wanted the eighth edition to capture the energy and creativity that surround conversations about student writing, wherever they take place, and to provide students with a trusted reference that sup- ports their development as writers. I also wanted the eighth edition to align easily with course goals and program outcomes, so I spent a good deal of time reviewing such documents and talking with faculty about how A Writer’s Reference can help them meet their goals. We all have high expectations for the writers in our courses; assigning a handbook designed specifically to meet these expectations makes possible both our mission and our students’ success.

Paging through A Writer’s Reference, you’ll discover features inspired by my conversations with teachers and students. One such feature is an emphasis on the relationship between reading and writing. Turn to tabbed section A (p. 69) to see new material that helps students read critically and write insightfully, engage with print and multimodal texts, and move beyond summary to analysis. The eighth edition shows students how to read carefully to understand an author’s ideas, how to read skeptically to question those ideas, and how to present their own ideas in response.

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In developing the eighth edition, I wanted students to have even more tools to support the challenges they face as research writers: turn- ing topics into questions, finding entry points in debates, and evalu- ating, integrating, and citing sources. In particular, I wanted to help students who are assigned to write an annotated bibliography, a core academic genre. In the eighth edition, students will find five new writ- ing guides, helpful tools that offer step-by-step instruction for complet- ing common college writing assignments, including writing an anno- tated bibliography.

A goal of the eighth edition was to develop a handbook that saves teachers’ time and increases students’ learning. I’m happy to say that teaching with A Writer’s Reference has become easier than ever. The eighth edition is now available with LaunchPad — a system that includes both a print handbook and e-Pages. For the e-Pages, I’ve writ- ten prompts and collaborative activities called “As you write” to help students apply handbook advice to their own drafts and to offer prac- tice with thesis statements, research questions, peer review, and more. The e-Pages also include videos and LearningCurve, game-like adap- tive quizzing — all easily assignable. Turn to page xi for more about the media.

As college teachers, we help our students develop as thinkers and writers. I can’t imagine work more important than this. Some years ago, a student told me that her first-year writing course encouraged her to become a person with things to say. I love these words and the hope they express that a writing course may have such a sustaining influence on one student’s life. I bring certain beliefs to A Writer’s Reference: that all students will learn to read deeply and write clearly, that they will find in their reading ideas they care about, and that they will write about these ideas with care and depth.

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What’s new in this edition?

An emphasis on critical reading. Substantially revised material in tabbed section A, “ Academic reading, writing, and speaking,” empha- sizes reading as the foundation of every college research and writing assignment. The handbook offers students a reading process, teaching them to read traditional and multimodal texts, research sources, their own work, and the work of their peers critically and reflectively.

7574 Reading and writing criticallyA1-b A1-boutlining a written text

Here is an excerpt from student writer Emilia Sanchez’s double- entry notebook.

noTe: To create a digital double-entry notebook, you can use a table or text boxes in a word processing program.

Ideas from the text My responses

“The question, however, is not whether or not these types of stores create jobs (although several studies claim they produce a net job loss in local communities) or whether they ultimately save consumers money” (1011).

Why are big-box stores bad if they create jobs or save people money? Taylor dismisses these possibilities without acknowledging their importance. My family needs to save money and needs jobs more than “chatting with the shopkeeper” (1011).

“The real concern . . . is whether [big-box stores are] good for a community’s soul” (1011).

“[S]mall businesses are great for a community” (1011).

Taylor is missing something here. Are all big-box stores bad? Are all small businesses great? Would getting rid of big-box stores save the “soul” of America? Is Main Street the “soul” of America? Taylor sounds overly sentimental. She assumes that people spend more money because they shop at big-box stores. And she assumes that small businesses are always better for consumers.

previewing a written text

■ Who is the author? What are the author’s credentials? ■ What is the author’s purpose: To inform? To persuade? To call to action? ■ Who is the expected audience? ■ When was the text written? Where was it published? ■ What kind of text is it: A book? A report? A scholarly article? A

policy memo?

Annotating a written text

■ What surprises, puzzles, or intrigues you about the text? ■ What question does the text attempt to answer? ■ What is the author’s thesis, or central claim? ■ What type of evidence does the author provide to support the

thesis? How persuasive is this evidence?

conversing with a written text

■ What are the strengths and limitations of the text? ■ Has the author drawn conclusions that you question? Do you have a

different interpretation of the evidence? ■ Does the text raise questions that it does not answer? ■ Does the author consider opposing viewpoints and treat them fairly?

Asking the “so what?” question

■ Why does the author’s thesis need to be argued, explained, or explored? What’s at stake?

■ What has the author overlooked in presenting this thesis?

guidelines for active reading

Asking the “So what?” question

As you read and annotate a text, make sure you understand its thesis, or central idea. Ask yourself: “What is the author’s thesis?” Then put the author’s thesis to the “So what?” test: “Why does this thesis matter? Why does it need to be argued?” Perhaps you’ll conclude that the thesis is too obvious and doesn’t matter at all — or that it matters so much that you feel the author stopped short and overlooked key details. Or perhaps you’ll feel that a reasonable person might draw different con- clusions about the issue.

A1-b outline a text to identify main ideas. You are probably familiar with using an outline as a planning tool to help you organize your ideas. An outline is a useful tool for reading, too. Outlining a text — identifying its main idea and major parts — can be an important step in your reading process.

As you outline, look closely for a text’s thesis statement (main idea) and topic sentences because they serve as important signposts for read- ers. A thesis statement often appears in the introduction, usually in the first or second paragraph. Topic sentences can be found at the begin- nings of most body paragraphs, where they announce a shift to a new topic. (See C2-a and C5-a.)

■ In the first sentence, mention the title of the text, the name of the author, and the author’s thesis.

■ Maintain a neutral tone; be objective. ■ As you present the author’s ideas, use the third-person point of view

and the present tense: Taylor argues. . . . (If you are writing in APA style, see APA-3b.)

■ Keep your focus on the text. Don’t state the author’s ideas as if they were your own.

■ Put all or most of your summary in your own words; if you borrow a phrase or a sentence from the text, put it in quotation marks and give the page number in parentheses.

■ Limit yourself to presenting the text’s key points. ■ Be concise; make every word count.

guidelines for writing a summary

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2nd Pages

Help with analyzing multimodal texts and composing in new genres. A new chapter about reading and writing about multimodal texts introduces new genres and practical strategies for analyzing these genres. Throughout the book, writing guides give tips for composing college assignments as podcasts, presentations, Web sites, and other alterna- tives to the traditional essay. New discussions of genre and sample papers in new genres (literacy narrative and reflective letter) align

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the book more closely with the goals of writing programs and the 2014 Council of Writing Program Administrators (WPA) outcomes.

Paraphrasing sources: strategies for multilingual/ESL writers. New content includes advice about paraphrasing sources effectively. This new section moves students away from the practice of word-by-word substitution and offers strategies for understanding and presenting another writ- er’s meaning.

Practical writing guides. Five new writing guides help students compose common assignments: argument essays, analytical essays, annotated bibliographies, reflective cover letters, and literacy narratives. The guides clarify the expectations of the genre; provide a step-by-step path as students explore, draft, and revise; and lay a foundation for writing in multiple disciplines.

Draft ● Draft a working thesis to focus your analysis. Remember that your

thesis is not the same as the author’s thesis. Your thesis presents your judgment of the text.

● Draft a plan to organize your paragraphs. Your introductory paragraph will briefly summarize the text and offer your thesis. Your body paragraphs will support your thesis with evidence from the text. Your conclusion will pull together the major points and show the significance of your analysis. (See C1-d.)

● Identify specific words, phrases, and sentences as evidence to support your thesis.


Ask your reviewers to give you specific comments. You can use the following questions to guide their feedback.

● Is the introduction effective and engaging? ● Is summary balanced with analysis? ● Does the thesis offer a clear judgment of the text? ● What objections might other writers pose to your analysis? ● Is the analysis well organized? Are there clear topic sentences

and transitions? ● Is there sufficient evidence? Is the evidence analyzed? ● Have you cited words, phrases, or sentences that are summarized

or quoted?


A2 Reading and writing about images and multimodal texts

In many of your college classes, you’ll have the opportunity to read and write about images, such as photographs or paintings, as well as multi- modal texts, such as advertisements, maps, videos, or Web sites. Multi- modal texts combine one or more of the following modes: words, static images, moving images, and sound.

A2-a read actively. Any image or multimodal text can be read — that is, carefully approached and examined to understand what it says and how it communicates its purpose and reaches its audience. When you read a multimodal text, you are often reading more than words; you might also be reading a

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Writing guide | Analytical essay

An analysis of a text allows you to examine the parts of a text to understand what it means and how it makes its meaning. Your goal is to offer your judgment of the text and to persuade readers to see it through your analytical perspective. A sample analytical essay begins on page 80.

Key features ● A careful and critical reading of a text reveals what the text says, how

it works, and what it means. In an analytical essay, you pay attention to the details of the text, especially its thesis and evidence.

● A thesis that offers a clear judgment of a text anchors your analysis. Your thesis might be the answer to a question you have posed about a text or the resolution of a problem you have identified in the text.

● Support for the thesis comes from evidence in the text. You summarize, paraphrase, and quote passages that support the claims you make about the text.

● A balance of summary and analysis helps readers who may not be familiar with the text you are analyzing. Summary answers the question of what a text says; an analysis looks at how a text makes its point.

Thinking ahead: Presenting and publishing You may have the opportunity to present or publish your analysis in the form of a multimodal text such as a slide show presentation. Consider how adding images or sound might strengthen your analysis or help you to better reach your audience. (See section A2.)

Writing your analytical essay


Generate ideas for your analysis by brainstorming responses to questions such as the following:

● What is the text about?

● What do you find most interesting, surprising, or puzzling about this text?

● What is the author’s thesis or central idea? Put the author’s thesis to the “So what?” test. (See p. 74.)

● What do your annotations of the text reveal about your response to it?


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Research and documentation advice fit for any college course. Substan- tially revised sections teach researchers to find an entry point in a debate and develop authority as a researcher. New advice on writing a research proposal gives practical help that’s useful across the curricu- lum. And because some sources are difficult to cite, new how-to boxes address author ship and new types of sources such as course materials and reposted Web content.

369368 R2-akeeping a working bibliographyThinking like a researcher; gathering sourcesR1-f

Surveying opinion

For some topics, you may find it useful to survey opinions through writ- ten questionnaires, telephone or e-mail polls, or questions posted on a social media site. Many people are reluctant to fill out long question- naires, so for a good response rate, limit your questions with your pur- pose in mind.

When possible, ask yes/no questions or give multiple-choice options. Surveys with such queries can be completed quickly, and the results are easy to tally. You may also want to ask a few open-ended questions to elicit more individual responses, some of which may be worth quoting in your paper.

Other field methods

Your firsthand visits to and observations of significant places, people, or events can enhance a paper in a variety of disciplines. If you aren’t able to visit an organization, a company, or a historic site, you may find use- ful information on an official Web site or a phone number or an e-mail address to use to contact a representative.

R1-f Write a research proposal. One effective way to manage your research project and focus your thinking is to write a research proposal. A proposal gives you an oppor- tunity to look back — to remind you why you decided to enter a specific research conversation — and to look forward — to predict any difficulties or obstacles that might arise during your project. Your objective is to make a case for the question you plan to explore, the sources you plan to use, and the feasibility of the project, given the time and resources available. As you take stock of your project, you also have the valuable opportunity to receive comments from your instructor and classmates about your proposed research question and search strategy.

The following format will help you organize your proposal.

• Research question. What question will you be exploring? Why does this question need to be asked? What do you hope to learn from the project?

• Research conversation. What have you learned so far about the debate or the specific research conversation you will enter? What entry point have you found to offer your own insights and ideas? R1 Thinking like a researcher > As you write: Writing a research proposal

• Search strategy. What kinds of sources will you use to explore your question? What sources have you found most useful, and why? How will you locate a variety of sources (print and visual, primary and secondary, for example)?

• Questions you are asking. What challenges, if any, do you anticipate? What questions are you asking about the project that readers of your proposal might help you answer?

R2 Managing information; taking notes responsibly

An effective researcher is a good record keeper. Whether you decide to keep records in your research log or in a file on your computer, you will need methods for managing information: maintaining a working bibli- ography (see R2-a), keeping track of source materials (see R2-b), and taking notes without plagiarizing your sources (see R2-c). (For more on avoiding plagiarism, see MLA-2 for MLA style, APA-2 for APA style, and CMS-2 for CMS style.)

R2-a Maintain a working bibliography. Keep a record of each source you read or view. This record, called a working bibliography, will help you compile the list of sources that will appear at the end of your paper. The format of this list depends on the documentation style you are using (for MLA style, see MLA-4; for APA style, see APA-4; for CMS style, see CMS-4). Using the proper style in your working bibliography will ensure that you have all the information you need to correctly cite any sources you use. (See R3-e for advice on using your working bibliography as the basis for an anno- tated bibliography.)

Most researchers save bibliographic information from the library’s catalog and databases and the Web. The information you need to collect is given in the chart on page 370. If you download a visual, you must gather the same information as for a print source.

For Web sources, some bibliographic information may not be avail- able, but spend time looking for it before assuming that it doesn’t exist. When information isn’t available on the home page, you may have to follow links to interior pages. (See also pp. 366 and 383 for more details about finding bibliographic information in online sources.) R2 Managing information > Finding research help: Choosing a

documentation style

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New guidelines for speaking effectively. A new section, A5, prepares students to remix, or adapt, their writing for delivery to a live audience, with emphasis on writing for the ear instead of for the eye.

Engaging new media: LaunchPad. A Writer’s Reference is now available with LaunchPad, which includes a full e-Book that’s easy to assign — as well as interactive e-Pages. The e-Pages, online at hackerhandbooks .com/writersref, engage students with writing prompts, scorable practice exercises, additional sample papers, and LearningCurve’s game-like adaptive quizzes. Easy-to-spot cross-references on the print pages direct students to the e-Pages content in LaunchPad.

• 270 practice exercises help students build skills and strengthen their editing. The exercises report to a gradebook so you can keep track of progress if you choose.

265264 Sentence fragmentsG5-d

Examples introduced by for example, in addition, or similar expressions

Other expressions that introduce examples or explanations can lead to unintentional fragments. Although you may begin a sentence with some of the following words or phrases, make sure that what follows has a subject and a verb.

also for example mainly and for instance or but in addition that is

Often the easiest solution is to turn the fragment into a sentence.

▶ In his memoir, Primo Levi describes the horrors of living in a


he worked concentration camp. For example, working without food and


su�ered suffering emotional abuse.

The writer corrected this fragment by adding a subject — he — and substituting verbs for the verbals working and suffering.

G5-d Exception: A f Writers occasionally use sentence fragments for special purposes.

FOR EMPHASIS Following the dramatic Americanization of their children, even my parents grew more publicly

Especially my mother. — Richard Rodriguez

TO ANSWER Are these new drug tests 100 percent A QUESTION reliable? Not in the opinion of most experts.

TRANSITIONS And now the opposing arguments.


IN ADVERTISING Fewer carbs. Improved taste.

Although fragments are sometimes appropriate, writers and readers do not always agree on when they are appropriate. That’s why you will

G5-dAcceptable fragments

Repair any fragment by attaching it to a nearby sentence or by rewriting it as a complete sentence. If a word group is correct, write “correct” after it. Possible revisions appear in the back of the book. More practice:

a One Greek island that should not be missed is Mykonos/. , /A vacation

spot for Europeans and a playground for the rich and famous.

a. Listening to the CD her sister had sent, Mia was overcome with a mix of emotions. Happiness, homesickness, and nostalgia.

b. Cortés and his soldiers were astonished when they looked down from the

c. Although my spoken Spanish is not very good. I can read the language with ease.

d. There are several reasons for not eating meat. One reason being that danger- ous chemicals are used throughout the various stages of meat production.

e. To learn how to sculpt beauty from everyday life. This is my intention in studying art and archaeology.

EXERCISE Repair each fragment in the following passage by attaching it to a sentence nearby or by rewriting it as a complete sentence. More practice:

Digital technology has revolutionized information delivery. Forever blurring the lines between information and entertainment. Yesterday’s readers of books and newspapers are today’s readers of e-books and blogs. Countless readers have moved on from print information entirely. Choosing instead to point, click, and scroll their way through a text online or on an e-reader. Once a nation of people spoon-fed television commercials and the six o’clock evening news. We are now seemingly addicted to YouTube and social media. Remember the family trip when Dad or Mom wrestled with a road map? On the way to St. Louis or Seattle? No wrestling is required with a GPS device. Unless it’s Mom and Dad wrestling over who gets to program the address. Accessing information now seems to be America’s favorite pastime. John Horrigan, associate director for research at the Pew Internet and American Life Project, reports that nearly half of American adults are “elite” users of technology. Who are “highly engaged” with digital content. As a country, we embrace information and communication technologies. Which now include iPods, smartphones, and tablets. Among children and adolescents, social media and other technology use are well established. For activities like socializing, gaming, and information gathering.

^ G5 Sentence fragments > Exercises: G5–3 to G5–7 G5 Sentence fragments > LearningCurve: Sentence fragments

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• 36 “As you write” prompts encourage students to apply the lessons of the handbook to their own writing. Students complete brief writing assignments about organizing a paper, drafting thesis statements, working with peers, integrating sources, and other writing topics.

• LearningCurve, game-like online quizzing for 29 topics, builds confidence with sentence-level skills by adapting to students’ responses and adjusting the difficulty level of the quiz items.

• Easy access. If you choose to package LaunchPad with the handbook, students simply use the activation code on the access card when they log in for the first time at /writersref.

What hasn’t changed?

• The handbook speaks to everything student writers need. Even the most popular search engines can’t give students the confidence that comes with a coherent, authoritative reference that covers the topics they need in a writing course. A Writer’s Reference supports students as they compose for different purposes and audiences and in a variety of genres and as they collaborate, revise, conduct research, document sources, format their writing, and edit for clarity.

• The handbook is easy to use and easy to understand. The explana- tions in A Writer’s Reference are brief, accessible, and illustrated by examples, most by student writers. The book’s many charts, checklists, tabs, menus, and directories are designed to help users find what they need quickly. And the user-friendly index includes both expert (coherence, ellipsis) and nonexpert (flow, dots) terminology.

• The handbook is coherent, authoritative, and trustworthy. Writing- related resources on the Web offer information, but they don’t offer instruction. With the eighth edition of A Writer’s Reference, students have reference content that has been class-tested by literally millions of students and instructors.

Supplements and media

Visit the catalog page for A Writer’s Reference for a complete list of instructor supplements, including Teaching with Hacker Handbooks, student supplements, videos, e-books (various formats), and other media:

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Many schools opt for a custom edition of A Writer’s Reference. Some programs choose to add a section about course outcomes and policies; others choose to customize by adding student writing from the school; still others decide simply to change the cover to reflect a recognizable campus location and the school name. More and more programs are creating custom editions by including publisher-supplied content — add itional tabbed sections on writing about literature, writing in the dis- ciplines, multimodal writing, ESL support, and support for online learn- ers. To discuss custom options for your school, contact your sales repre- sentative or visit

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This service is not just for CWP courses! Writing Help Center tutors are available to help students with essays, applications, scholarships, and papers from all other courses. All are welcome!

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I am grateful, as always, for the expertise, enthusiasm, and classroom experience that so many individuals — our very own handbook commu- nity — brought to the eighth edition.


For their participation in a focus group at the 2014 Conference on Col- lege Composition and Communication, I would like to thank Holly Bauer, University of California, San Diego; Jason DePolo, North Caro- lina Agricultural and Technical State University; Violet Dutcher, East- ern Mennonite University; Michael Keller, South Dakota State Univer- sity; and Katherine Tirabassi, Keene State College.

I thank those instructors who offered detailed feedback on vari- ous parts of the handbook and its supplements: Marcia Allen, Univer- sity of Maryland University College; Clinton Atchley, Henderson State University; Phyllis Benay, Keene State College; Wendy Brooks, Palm Beach State College; Elizabeth Browning, Virginia Western Commu- nity College; Barbara Butler, Bellevue College; Juan Calle, Broward College; Sybil Canon, Northwest Mississippi Community College; Margaret Cassidy, Adelphi University; Michele Cheung, University of Southern Maine; Vicky Chiu-Irion, University of Hawaii; Jennifer Condon, Iowa Central Community College; James Crooks, Shasta College; Jill Dahlman, University of Hawaii; Jamie Danielson, Iowa Central Community College; Tommie Delaney, Columbus State Uni- versity; Susan Denning, Clark College; Larnell Dunkley, Harold Wash- ington College; Denise Engler, American River College; Jessica Far- rington, Embry-Riddle Aeronautical University; Jan Geyer, Hudson Valley Community College; Ebony Gibson, Clayton State University; Jessica Gordon, Virginia Commonwealth University; Tarez Samra Graban, Florida State University; Gwendolyn Harold, Clayton State University; Vicki Hendricks, Broward College, South Campus; Judy Hevener, Blue Ridge Community College and Stuarts Draft High School; Daniel Hirschhorn, University of Maryland University Col- lege (and Montgomery College); Christian Horlick, Virginia Common- wealth University; Barry House, Lincoln Land Community College; Susan Howard, Ivy Tech Community College; Christine Howell, Met- ropolitan Community College–Penn Valley; Kathryn Ingram-Wilson, Laredo Community College; Laura Jones, Atlanta Technical College; Terra Kincaid, El Paso Community College; Lola King, Trinity Valley Community College; Guy Krueger, University of Mississippi; Mildred

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Landrum-Hesser, Towson University; Denise Marchionda, Middlesex Community College; Gail Marxhausens, Lone Star College CyFair; John McKinnis, Buffalo State College; Kristopher Mecholsky, Univer- sity of Maryland University College; Terence Meehan, Northern Vir- ginia Community College; Ashley Moorshead, Community College of Aurora; Joseph Nagy, University of California, Los Angeles; Luis Naz- ario, Pueblo Community College; Barbra Nightingale, Broward Col- lege; Shevaun Donelli O’Connell, Buffalo State College; Gary Olson, Bellevue College; MaryGrace Paden, John Tyler Community Col- lege; Jessica Parker, Metroplitan State University Denver; Michelle Paulsen, The Victoria College; Philip Peloquin, Ohio Christian Uni- versity; Neil Plakcy, Broward College; Holland Prior, Azusa Pacific University; Maria Ramos, J. Sargeant Reynolds Community College; Rolando Regino, Moreno Valley College; Joanna Richter, Laredo Com- munity College; Cortney Robbins, Indiana Tech; Sundi Rose-Holt, Columbus State University; Jay Ruzesky, Vancouver Island Univer- sity; Donna Samet, Broward College; Andrea Laurencell Sheridan, SUNY Orange; Elizabeth Siler, Washington State University; Col- leen Soares, University of Hawaii Leeward Community College; Neil Starr, Nova Southeastern University; Debra Stevens, Las Positats Col- lege; Patrick Tompkins, John Tyler Community College; David Wood, Northern Michigan University; Pam Wright, University of California, San Diego.


I am grateful to the following individuals, fellow teachers of writing, for their smart revisions of important content: Kimberli Huster, ESL spe- cialist at Robert Morris University, updated Resources for Multilingual Writers and ESL and wrote new material on paraphrasing sources for the Multilingual section of the handbook; and Sara McCurry, professor of English at Shasta College, revised both Teaching with Hacker Hand- books and Strategies for Online Learners.


Including sample student writing in each edition of the handbook makes the resource useful for you and your students. I would like to thank the following students who have let us adapt their papers as models: Ned Bishop, Sophie Harba, Sam Jacobs, Luisa Mirano, Michelle Nguyen, Emilia Sanchez, and Ren Yoshida.

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Bedford/St. Martin’s

A comprehensive handbook is a collaborative writing project, and it is my pleasure to acknowledge and thank the enormously talented Bedford/ St. Martin’s editorial team, whose deep commitment to stu- dents informs each new feature of A Writer’s Reference. Joan Feinberg, director of digital composition and Diana Hacker’s first editor, helped shape the identity of this flagship handbook. Denise Wydra, former vice president for the humanities; Leasa Burton, publisher for composition; and Karen Henry, editorial director for English, have helped guide us with their insights about how the college handbook market is changing and how we can continue to meet the needs of the college writer in the digital age.

Michelle Clark, executive editor, is an author’s dream — a treasured friend and colleague and an endless source of creativity and clarity. Michelle combines wisdom with patience, imagination with practical- ity, and hard work with good cheer. Barbara Flanagan, senior editor, has worked on the Hacker handbooks for more than twenty-five years and brings attention to detail, keen insights, and unrivaled expertise in documentation and media. Mara Weible, senior editor, brings to the eighth edition her teacher’s sensibility and superb editorial judgment. Thanks to Kylie Paul, associate editor, for assistance with art and per- missions, for managing the review process, and for developing several ancillaries, and to editorial assistants Amanda Legee and Stephanie Thomas, who helped with video content and with our student research project. Many thanks to Rosemary Jaffe, senior production editor, for keeping us on schedule and for producing both the print pages and the e-Pages with unparalleled skill and care. And I am grateful to the media team — Harriet Wald, Rebecca Merrill, Marissa Zanetti, Kim- berly Hampton, and Allison Hart — for imagining and producing engag- ing media for the writing course. Insight from Bedford colleagues Jane Helms, Jimmy Fleming, and Nick Carbone, who, like me, spend many, many hours on the road and in faculty offices, is always treasured. Thanks to Linda McLatchie, copy editor, for her thoroughness and attention to detail; to Claire Seng-Niemoeller, text designer, who crafted another open and beautifully designed edition of the book; to Donna Dennison, art director, who has given the book a strikingly beautiful cover; and to Billy Boardman, design manager, for extending the cover design to our many versions.

Last, but never least, I offer thanks to my own students who, over many years, have shaped my teaching and helped me understand their challenges in becoming college writers. Thanks to my friends and col- leagues Suzanne Lane, Maxine Rodburg, Laura Saltz, and Kerry Walk

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for sustaining conversations about the teaching of writing. And thanks to my family: to Joshua Alper, an attentive reader of life and literature, for his steadfastness across the drafts; to my parents, Walter and Louise Sommers, and my aunt Elsie Adler, who encouraged me to write and set me forth on a career of writing and teaching; to my extended family, Sam, Kate, Ron, Charles Mary, Devin, Demian, Liz, and Alexander, for their good humor and good cheer; and to Rachel and Curran, Alexan- dra and Brian, witty and wise beyond measure, always generous with their instruction and inspiration in all things that matter. And to Lailah Dragonfly, my granddaughter, thanks for the joy and sweetness you bring to life.

Nancy Sommers

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C Composing

and Revising


Com posing and Revising

C Composing and Revising C1 Planning, 3

a Assessing the writing situation, 3

b Exploring your subject, 4 c Drafting and revising a working

thesis statement, 9 d Drafting a plan, 13

C2 Drafting, 15 a Drafting an introduction, 15 b Drafting the body, 17 c Drafting a conclusion, 20 d Managing your files, 21

C3 Reviewing, revising, and editing, 22

a Developing strategies for revising with comments, 22

b Approaching global revision in cycles, 28

c Revising and editing sentences, 30

d Proofreading the final manuscript, 31

e Student writing: Literacy narrative, 32

Writing guide: Literacy narrative, 37

C4 Preparing a portfolio; reflecting on your writing, 38

a Understanding the benefits of reflection, 38

b Student writing: Reflective letter for a portfolio, 39

Writing guide: Reflective letter, 42

C5 Writing paragraphs, 43 a Focusing on a main point, 43 b Developing the main point, 45 c Choosing a suitable pattern

of organization, 46 d Making paragraphs coherent, 51 e Adjusting paragraph length, 56

C6 Document design: A gallery of models, 57

MLA essay format, 59 MLA works cited page, 60 APA title page, 61 APA abstract, 62 APA essay format, 63 APA list of references, 63 Business report with a visual, 64 Business letter, 65 Résumé, 66 Professional memo, 67 E-mail message, 68


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6 8

3Assessing the writing situation C1-a

Writing is a process of figuring out what you think, not a matter of recording already developed thoughts. Since it’s not possible to think about everything all at once, you will find the process more manageable if you handle a piece of writing in stages. You will generally move from planning to drafting to revising, but as your ideas develop, you will find yourself circling back and returning to earlier stages.

C1 Planning C1-a Assess the writing situation. Begin by taking a look at your writing situation. Consider your subject, your purpose, your audience, available sources of information, and any assignment requirements such as genre, length, document design, and deadlines (see the checklist on p. 5). It is likely that you will make final decisions about all of these matters later in the writing process — after a first draft, for example — but you will become a more effective writer if you think about as many of them as possible in advance.


In many writing situations, part of your challenge will be determining your purpose, or your reason, for writing. The wording of an assignment may suggest its purpose. If no guidelines are given, you may need to ask yourself, “Why am I communicating with my readers?” or “What do I want to accomplish?” College writers most often write for the following purposes:

to inform to analyze to explain to synthesize to summarize to propose to persuade to call readers to action to evaluate to change attitudes


Analyzing your audience can often help you determine how to accom- plish your purpose — how much detail or explanation to provide, what kind of tone and language to use, and what potential objections to address. The choices you make as you write will tell readers who you think they are (novices or experts, for example) and will show respect for your readers’ values and perspectives. The checklist on page 5 includes questions that will help you analyze your audience and develop an effective strategy for reaching your readers. C1 Planning > Exercises: C1–3

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NOTE: When you write e-mail messages to instructors, classmates, or potential employers, respect your reader by using a concise, meaning- ful subject line; keeping paragraphs brief and focused; proofreading for careless errors; and paying attention to your tone. Don’t write some- thing that you wouldn’t feel comfortable saying directly to your reader. Finally, avoid forwarding another person’s message without permission.


Pay close attention to the genre, or type of writing assigned. Each genre is a category of writing meant for a specific purpose and audience — an essay in a writing class, a lab report in a biology class, a policy memo in a criminal justice class, or a case study for an education class. Some- times the genre is yours to choose, and you need to decide if a particular genre — a poster presentation, an audio essay, a Web page, or a podcast, for example — will help you communicate your purpose and reach readers.

Academic English What counts as good writing varies from culture to culture. In some situations, you will need to become familiar with the writing styles — such as direct or indirect, personal or impersonal, plain or embellished — that are valued by the culture or discipline for which you are writing.

C1-b Experiment with ways to explore your subject. Instead of plunging into a first draft, experiment with one or more tech- niques for exploring your subject and discovering your purpose: talking and listening, reading and annotating texts, asking questions, brainstorm- ing, clustering, freewriting, keeping a journal, blogging. Whatever tech- nique you turn to, the goal is the same: to generate ideas that will lead you to a question, a problem, or a topic that you want to explore further.

Talking and listening

Because writing is a process of figuring out what you think about a sub- ject, it can be useful to try out your ideas on other people. Conversation can deepen and refine your ideas even before you begin to draft. By talking and listening to others, you can also discover what they find C1 Planning > As you write: Thinking like a college writer C1 Planning > As you write: Exploring a subject

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5C1-bExploring your subject


■ Has the subject been assigned, or are you free to choose your own? ■ Why is your subject worth writing about? What questions would you

like to explore? How might readers benefit from reading about it? ■ Do you need to narrow your subject to a more specific topic (because

of length restrictions, for instance)?

Purpose and audience

■ Why are you writing: To inform readers? To persuade them? To call them to action? Some combination of these?

■ Who are your readers? How well informed are they about the subject? ■ Will your readers resist any of your ideas? What possible objections

will you need to anticipate and counter?


■ What genre — type of writing — does your assignment require: A report? A proposal? An analysis of data? An essay?

■ If the genre is not assigned, what genre is appropriate for your subject, purpose, and audience?

■ Does the genre require a specific design format or method of organization?

Sources of information

■ Where will your information come from: Reading? Research? Direct observation? Interviews? Questionnaires?

■ What type of evidence suits your subject, purpose, audience, and genre? ■ What documentation style is required: MLA? APA? CMS (Chicago)?

Length and document design

■ Do you have length specifications? If not, what length seems appropriate, given your subject, purpose, audience, and genre?

■ Is a particular format required? If so, do you have guidelines or examples to consult?

■ How might visuals — graphs, tables, images — help you convey information?

Reviewers and deadlines

■ Who will be reviewing your draft in progress: Your instructor? A writing tutor? Your classmates?

■ What are your deadlines? How much time will you need for the various stages of writing, including proofreading and printing or posting the final draft?

Checklist for assessing the writing situation

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interesting, what they are curious about, and where they disagree with you. If you are planning to develop an argument, you can try it out on listeners with other points of view.

Many writers begin a writing project by debating a point with friends or chatting with an instructor. Others prefer to record them- selves talking through their own thoughts. Some writers exchange ideas by sending e-mails or texts or by posting to a blog. You may be encouraged to share ideas with your classmates in an online workshop, where you can begin to refine your thoughts before starting a draft.

Reading and annotating texts

Reading is an important way to deepen your understanding of a topic, learn from the insights and research of others, and expand your perspective. Annotating a text, written or visual, encourages you to read actively — to highlight key concepts, to note possible con- tradictions in an argument, or to raise ques- tions for further research and investigation. As you annotate, you record your impressions and begin a conversation with a text and its author. See A1-a for a student’s annotations on an assigned article.

Asking questions

When gathering material for a story, journalists routinely ask them- selves Who? What? When? Where? Why? and How? These questions help journalists get started and ensure that they will not overlook an important fact.

Whenever you are writing about ideas, events, or people, asking questions is one way to get started. One student, whose topic was the negative reaction in 1915 to D. W. Griffith’s silent film The Birth of a Nation, began exploring her topic with this set of questions:

Who objected to the film?

What were the objections?

When were the protests first voiced?

Where were protests most strongly expressed?

Why did protesters object to the film?

How did protesters make their views known?

If you are writing in a particular discipline, try to find out which questions its scholars typically explore. Look for clues in assigned read- ings and class discussions to understand how a discipline’s questions help you grasp its concerns and conventions.


Read critically and take notes before you write.

▶ Guidelines for active reading: A2-a

▶ Taking notes: R2-c ▶ Analyzing texts: A1-d


Effective college writers begin by asking questions.

▶ Asking questions in academic disciplines: A6-b

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determining the purpose of the assignment The wording of an assignment may suggest its purpose. You might be expected to do one of the following in a college writing assignment:

■ summarize information from books, lectures, or research (See A1-c.) ■ analyze ideas and concepts (See A1-d.) ■ take a position and defend it with evidence (See A4.) ■ synthesize (combine ideas from) several sources and create an

original argument (See MLA-3c and APA-3c.)

understanding how to answer an assignment’s questions Many assignments will ask you to answer a how or why question. You cannot answer such questions using only facts; instead, you will need to take a position. For example, the question “What are the survival rates for leukemia patients?” can be answered by reporting facts. The question “Why are the survival rates for leukemia patients in one state lower than they are in a neighboring state?” must be answered with both a claim and facts.

If a list of questions appears in the assignment, be careful — instructors rarely expect you to answer all of the questions in order. Look instead for topics or themes that will help you ask your own questions.

Recognizing implied questions When you are asked to discuss, analyze, argue, or consider, your instructor will often expect you to answer a how or why question.

Discuss the effects of the No Child Left Behind Act on special education programs.

= How has the No Child Left Behind Act affected special education programs?

Consider the recent rise of attention deficit hyperactivity disorder diagnoses.

= Why are diagnoses of attention deficit hyperactivity disorder rising?

Recognizing disciplinary expectations When you are asked to write in a specific discipline, pay attention to the genre, or type of writing assigned. Each genre has agreed-upon expectations and disciplinary conventions. Look closely at the key terms of the assignment and know what kinds of evidence and citation style your instructor expects you to use. (See A6.)

Reading an assignment


Brainstorming is a good way to figure out what you know and what ques- tions you have. You begin by listing ideas in the order in which they occur to you. Listing ideas can help a writer narrow a subject and identify a position. An early list is often a source of ideas and a springboard to new ideas. Writers can come back to their brainstorming notes and rearrange them, delete some, or add others.

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In its purest form, freewriting is simply nonstop writing. You set aside ten minutes or so and write whatever comes to mind, without pausing to think about word choice, spelling, or even meaning. Free- writing lets you ask questions without feeling you have to answer them. Sometimes a question that comes to mind at this stage will point you in an unexpected and productive direction.

To explore ideas on a particular topic, consider using a technique called focused freewriting. Again, you write quickly and freely, but this time you focus on a specific subject and pay attention to the connections among your ideas.

Keeping a journal

A journal is a collection of informal, exploratory, sometimes experi- mental writing. In a journal, often meant for your eyes only, you can take risks. You might freewrite, pose questions, comment on an interesting


Clustering (sometimes called mapping) highlights relationships among ideas. To cluster ideas, write your subject in the center of a sheet of paper, draw a circle around it, and surround the circle with related ideas connected to it with lines. If some of the satellite ideas lead to more specific clusters, write them down as well. The writer of this cluster diagram was exploring ideas for an essay on obesity in children.

obesity in children

health problems later

in life

funding for athletic programs

sleep disorders heart



TV ads for unhealthy


product placement of

foods in movies, TV shows

exercise genetics

using media instead of

being active

fast foods in school vending



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9C1-cDrafting and revising a working thesis

idea from one of your classes, or keep a list of questions that occur to you while reading. You might imagine a conversation between your- self and your readers or stage a debate to understand opposing posi- tions. A journal can also serve as a sourcebook of ideas for future essays.


Although a blog is a type of journal, it is a public writing space rather than a private one. In a blog, you might express opinions, make observations, recap events, play with language, or interpret an image. You can explore an idea for a paper by writing posts from different angles. Since most blogs have a commenting feature, you can create a conversation by inviting readers to give you feedback — ask questions, pose counterarguments, or suggest other sources on a topic.

C1-c draft and revise a working thesis statement. For many types of writing, you will be able to assert your central idea in a sentence or two. Such a statement, which ordinarily appears in the opening paragraph of your finished essay, is called a thesis.

What makes an effective thesis statement?

A successful thesis statement is a central idea that requires supporting evidence; its scope is appropriate for the assigned length of the essay; and it is focused and specific. A thesis is a promise to readers. It is often one or more of the following:

• your answer to a question you have posed

• the resolution for a problem you have identified

• a statement that announces your position on a debatable topic

Drafting a working thesis

As you explore your topic, you will begin to see possible ways to focus your material. At this point, try to settle on a tentative central idea, or working thesis statement. The more complex your topic, the more your focus may change. As your ideas develop, you’ll need to revisit your working thesis to see if it represents the position you want to take or if it can be supported by the sources of evidence you have accumulated.

You’ll find that the process of answering a question you have posed, resolving a problem you have identified, or taking a position on a debat- able topic will focus your thinking and lead you to develop a working C1 Planning > Exercises: C1–5 to C1–7

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thesis. Here, for example, are one student’s efforts to pose a question and draft a working thesis for an essay in his ethics course.


Should athletes who enhance their performance through biotechnol- ogy be banned from athletic competition?

Working thEsis

Athletes who boost their performance through biotechnology should be banned from athletic competition.

The working thesis offers a useful place to start writing — a way to limit the topic and focus a first draft — but it doesn’t take into consideration the expectations of readers who will ask “Why?” and “So what?” The student has taken a position — athletes who boost their performance through biotechnology should be banned — but he hasn’t answered why these athletes should be banned. To fully answer his own question and to claim some- thing specific in his thesis, he might push his own thinking with the word because.

strongEr Working thEsis

Athletes who boost their performance through steroids should be banned from competition because biotechnology gives athletes an unfair advantage and disrupts the sense of fair play.

Revising a working thesis

As you move to a clearer and more specific position you want to take, you’ll start to see ways to revise your working thesis. You may find that the evidence you collected supports a different thesis; or you may find that your position has changed as you learned more about your topic.

One effective way to revise a working thesis is to put it to the “So what?” test (see the box on p. 11). Such questions help you keep audi- ence and purpose — and the expectations of your assignment — in mind as you revise.

Using a problem/strategy approach to revise a working thesis

Revising a working thesis is easier if you have a method or an approach. The following problem/strategy approach is an effective way to evaluate and revise a working thesis, especially if you tend to start


The thesis statement is central to many types of writing.

▶ Writing about texts: A1 ▶ Constructing

arguments: A4 ▶ Writing research papers:

MLA-1, APA-1, and CMS-1 C1 Planning > As you write: Revising a thesis

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Working thEsis

The first polygraph was developed by Dr. John A. Larson in 1921.

ProBLEM The thesis is too factual. A reader could not disagree with it or debate it; no further development of this idea is required.

strAtEgY Enter a debate by posing a question about your topic that has more than one possible answer. For example: Should the polygraph be used by private employers? Your thesis should be your answer to the question.

rEvisED thEsis

Because the polygraph has not been proved reliable, even under controlled conditions, its use by private employers should be banned.

A thesis should be an answer to a question, not a question itself.

Working thEsis

Would John F. Kennedy have continued to escalate the war in Vietnam if he had lived?

ProBLEM The thesis is a question, not an answer to a question.

strAtEgY Take a position on your topic by answering the question you have posed. Your thesis should be your answer to the question.

rEvisED thEsis

Although John F. Kennedy sent the first American troops to Vietnam before he died, an analysis of his foreign policy suggests that he would not have escalated the war had he lived.

out with thesis statements that are too factual, too broad, too narrow, or too vague.

A thesis should require proof or further development through facts and details; it cannot itself be a fact or a description.

Use the following questions to help you revise your working thesis. ■ Why would readers want to read an essay with this thesis? How

would you respond to a reader who hears your thesis and asks “So what?” or “Why does it matter?”

■ Does your thesis answer a question, propose a solution to a problem, or take a position in a debate? Why will readers be interested in your answer, solution, or position?

■ Will any readers disagree with this thesis? If so, what might they say? ■ Is the thesis too obvious? If you cannot come up with interpretations

that oppose your own, consider revising your thesis. ■ Can you support your thesis with the evidence available?

Putting your working thesis to the “So what?” test

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A thesis should be of sufficient scope for your assignment; it should not be too broad.

Working thEsis

Mapping the human genome has many implications for health and science.

ProBLEM The thesis is too broad. Even in a very long research paper, you would not be able to discuss all the implications of mapping the human genome.

strAtEgY Focus on a subtopic of your original topic. Once you have chosen a subtopic, take a position in an ongoing debate and pose a question that has more than one answer. For example: Should people be tested for genetic diseases? Your thesis should be your answer to the question.

rEvisED thEsis

Although scientists can now detect genetic predisposition for specific diseases, policymakers should establish clear guidelines about whom to test and under what circumstances.

A thesis also should not be too narrow.

Working thEsis

A person who carries a genetic mutation linked to a particular disease might or might not develop that disease.

ProBLEM The thesis is too narrow. It does not suggest any argument or debate about the topic.

strAtEgY Identify challenging questions that readers might ask about your topic. Then pose a question that has more than one answer. For example: Do the risks of genetic testing outweigh its usefulness? Your thesis should be your answer to this question.

rEvisED thEsis

Though positive results in a genetic test do not guarantee that the disease will develop, such results can cause psychological trauma; genetic testing should therefore be avoided if possible.

A thesis should be sharply focused, not too vague. Avoid fuzzy, hard-to-define words such as interesting, good, or disgusting.

Working thEsis

The Vietnam Veterans Memorial is an interesting structure.

ProBLEM This thesis is too fuzzy and unfocused. It’s difficult to define interesting, and the sentence doesn’t give readers any cues about where the essay is going.

strAtEgY Focus your thesis with concrete language and a clear plan. Pose a question about the topic that has more than one answer. For example: How does the physical structure of the Vietnam Veterans Memorial shape the experience of visitors? Your thesis — your answer to the question — should use specific language.

rEvisED thEsis

By inviting visitors to see their own reflections in the wall, the Vietnam Veterans Memorial creates a link between the present and the past.

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13Drafting a plan C1-d

C1-d draft a plan. Once you have drafted a working thesis, listing and organizing your supporting ideas can help you figure out how to flesh out the thesis. Creating outlines, whether formal or informal, can help you make sure your writing is focused and logical and can help you identify any gaps in your support.

When to use an informal outline

You might want to sketch an informal outline to see how you will sup- port your thesis and to figure out a tentative structure for your ideas. Informal outlines can take many forms. Perhaps the most common is simply the thesis followed by a list of major ideas.

Working thesis: Hunger Games heroine Katniss Everdeen evolves from a character

unable to connect meaningfully with others to one who leads and relies on others,

and it is this change that brings about a successful revolution over the Capitol.

• Disconnecting people from one another is part of a government plan to

maintain rule.

• Katniss remains emotionally disconnected from her own mother after her

father’s death.

• Relationships with Rue and Johanna are milestones in Katniss’s emotional


• The Mockingjay movement succeeds not because of Katniss’s charisma, but

because of her ability to stir feelings of hope and connection in the Districts.

If you began by brainstorming a list of ideas, you can turn the list into a rough outline by crossing out some ideas, adding others, and putting the ideas in a logical order.

When to use a formal outline

Early in the writing process, rough outlines have certain advantages: They can be produced quickly, they are obviously tentative, and they can be revised easily. However, a formal outline may be useful later in the writing process, after you have written a rough draft, especially if your topic is complex. It can help you see whether the parts of your essay work together and whether your essay’s structure is logical.

The following formal outline brought order to the research paper that appears in MLA-5b, on regulating unhealthy eating. The student’s thesis is an important part of the outline. Everything else in the outline supports it, directly or indirectly.

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ForMAL outLinE

Thesis: In the name of public health and safety, state governments have the responsibility to shape public health policies and to regulate healthy eating choices, especially since doing so offers a potentially large social benefit for a relatively small cost.

I. Debates surrounding food regulation have a long history in the U.S.

A. The 1906 Pure Food and Drug Act guarantees inspection of meat and dairy products.

B. Such regulations are considered reasonable because consumers are protected from harm with little cost.

C. Consumers consider reasonable regulations to be an important government function to stop harmful items from entering the marketplace.

II. Even though food meets safety standards, further regulation is needed.

A. The typical American diet—processed sugars, fats, and refined flours— is damaging over time.

B. Related health problems are diabetes, cancer, and heart problems.

C. Passing chronic-disease-related legislation is our single most important public health challenge.

III. Legislating which foods they can eat is not a popular solution for most Americans.

A. A proposed New York City regulation banning the sale of soft drinks greater than twelve ounces failed in 2012, and in California a proposed soda tax failed in 2011.

B. Many consumers find such laws to be unreasonable restrictions on freedom of choice.

C. Opposition to food and beverage regulation is similar to the opposition to early tobacco legislation; the public views the issue as one of personal responsibility.

D. Counterpoint: Freedom of “choice” is a myth; our choices are heavily influenced by marketing.

IV. The United States has a history of regulating unhealthy behaviors.

A. Tobacco-related restrictions faced opposition.

B. Seat belt laws are a useful analogy.

C. The public seems to support laws that have a good cost-benefit ratio; the cost of food/beverage regulations is low, and most people agree that the benefits would be high.

V. Americans believe that personal choice is lost when regulations such as taxes and bans are instituted.

A. Regulations open up the door to excessive control and interfere with cultural and religious traditions.

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B. Counterpoint: Burdens on individual liberty are a reasonable price to pay for large social health benefits.

VI. Public opposition continues to stand in the way of food regulation to promote healthier eating. We must consider whether to allow the costly trend of rising chronic disease to continue in the name of personal choice, or whether we are willing to support the legal changes and public health policies that will reverse that trend.

C2 Drafting Generally, the introduction to a piece of writing announces the main point; the body develops it, usually in several paragraphs; and the con- clusion drives it home. You can begin drafting, however, at any point. If you find it difficult to introduce a paper that you have not yet written, try drafting the body first and saving the introduction for later.

C2-a draft an introduction. Your introduction will usually be a paragraph of 50 to 150 words (in a longer paper, it may be more than one paragraph). Perhaps the most common strategy is to open the paragraph with a few sentences that engage the reader and establish your purpose for writing, your central idea. The statement of your main point is called a thesis. (See also C1-c.)

In the following introduction, the thesis is highlighted.

As the United States industrialized in the nineteenth century, using immigrant labor, social concerns took a backseat to the task of building a prosperous nation. The government did not regulate industries and did not provide an effective safety net for the poor or for those who became sick or injured on the job. Immigrants and the poor did have a few advocates, however. Settlement houses such as Hull-House in Chicago provided information, services, and a place for reform-minded individuals to gather and work to improve the conditions of the urban poor. Alice Hamilton was one of these reformers. Her work at Hull-House spanned twenty-two years, and she later expanded her reform work throughout the nation. Hamilton’s efforts helped to improve the lives of immigrants and drew attention and respect to the problems and people that until then had been ignored.

— Laurie McDonough, student C2 Drafting > As you write: Revising an introduction

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Each sentence leading to your thesis should engage readers by drawing them into the world of the essay and showing them why your essay is worth reading.

Whether you are writing for a scholarly audience, a professional audience, or a general audience, you cannot assume your readers’ inter- est in the topic. The hook should spark curiosity and offer readers a reason to continue.

The following chart provides strategies for drafting an introduction.

The following strategies can provide a hook for your reader, whether you are composing a traditional essay or a multimodal work such as a slide presentation or a video.

■ Offer a startling statistic or an unusual fact ■ Ask a question ■ Introduce a quotation or a bit of dialogue ■ Provide historical background ■ Define a term or concept ■ Propose a problem, contradiction, or dilemma ■ Use a vivid example or image ■ Develop an analogy ■ Relate an anecdote

Strategies for drafting an introduction

Academic English If you come from a culture that prefers an indi- rect approach in writing, you may feel that asserting a thesis early in an essay sounds unrefined or even rude. In the United States, how- ever, readers appreciate a direct approach; when you state your point as directly as possible, you show that you understand your topic and value your readers’ time.

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C2-b draft the body. The body of your essay develops support for your thesis, so it’s impor- tant to have at least a working thesis before you start writing. What does your thesis promise readers? What question are you trying to answer? What problem are you trying to solve? What is your position on the topic? Keep these questions in mind as you draft the body of your essay.

Asking questions as you draft

You may already have written an introduction that includes your work- ing thesis. If not, as long as you have a draft thesis, you can begin devel- oping the body and return later to the introduction. If your working thesis suggests a plan or if you have sketched a preliminary outline, try to organize your paragraphs accordingly.

Draft the body of your essay by writing at least one paragraph about each supporting point you listed in the planning stage. As you draft the body, keep asking questions; keep anticipating what your readers may need to know.

For more detailed help with drafting and developing paragraphs, see C5.

uSiNG SOuRCES RESPONSibLy: As you draft, keep careful notes about sources you read and consult. (See R2-c.) If you quote, paraphrase, or sum- marize a source, include a citation, even in your draft. You will save time and avoid plagiarism if you follow the rules of citation while drafting.

Adding visuals as you draft

As you draft, you may decide that support for your thesis could come from one or more visuals. Visuals can convey information concisely and powerfully. Graphs and tables, for example, can simplify complex numerical information. Images — including photographs and dia- grams — often express an idea more vividly than words can. Keep in mind that if you download a visual or use published information to cre- ate your own visual, you must credit your source.

Always consider how a visual supports your purpose and how your audience might respond to it. A student writing about the shift from print to online news, for example, used a screen shot of a link embedded in a news article to illustrate a point (see A4-h). Another student, writ- ing about treatments for childhood obesity, created a table to display data she discussed in her paper (see APA-5b).

As you draft, carefully choose visuals to supplement your writing, not to substitute for it. The chart on pages 18–19 describes eight types of visuals and their purposes.

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Pie chart

Pie charts compare a part or parts to the whole. Segments of the pie represent percentages of the whole (and always total 100 percent).

Health insurance coverage in the United States (2007)

Employer-insured 54%

Uninsured 15% Medicaid 13% Medicare 12%

Individual 5%

Other public insurance 1%

bar graph (or line graph)

Bar graphs highlight trends over a period of time or compare numerical data. Line graphs display the same data as bar graphs; the data are graphed as points, and the points are connected with lines.

THE PURSUIT OF PROPERTY Home ownership rates in the United States






20% 1930 1940 1950 1960 1970 1980 1990 2000


An infographic presents data in a visually engaging form. The data are usually numerical, as in bar graphs or line graphs, but they are represented by a graphic element instead of by bars or lines.


Tables display numbers and words in columns and rows. They can be used to organize complicated numerical information into an easily  understood format.

Sources [top to bottom]: Kaiser Foundation; US Census Bureau; Data provided courtesy of www; UNAIDS.

Choosing visuals to suit your purpose

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Photographs vividly depict people, scenes, or objects discussed in a text.


Diagrams, useful in scientific and technical writing, concisely illustrate processes, structures, or interactions.


Flowcharts show structures (the hierarchy of employees at a company, for example) or steps in a process and their relation to one another. (See also p. 140 for another example.)

A�ect a designated wilderness area?

Prevent re, insects, or disease?

Not applicable

Permissible Follow wilderness guidelines

Proposed action




Maps illustrate distances, historical information, or demographics and often use symbols for geographic features and points of interest.

Sources [top to bottom]: “Tornado Touch,” photo by Fred Zwicky © 2004. Reprinted by permission of the author. Courtesy of NIAMS Image Gallery; Arizona Board of Regents; Lynn Hunt et al., The Making of the West. Copyright © 2005 by Bedford/St. Martin’s. Reprinted by permission of Bedford/St. Martin’s.

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C2-c Draft a conclusion. A conclusion should remind readers of the essay’s main idea without repeating it. Often the concluding paragraph can be relatively short. By the end of the essay, readers should already understand your main point; your conclusion drives it home and, perhaps, gives readers some- thing more to consider.

To conclude an essay analyzing the shifting roles of women in the military services, one student discusses her topic’s implications for soci- ety as a whole.

As the military continues to train women in jobs formerly reserved for men, our understanding of women’s roles in society will no doubt continue to change. As news reports of women training for and taking part in combat operations become commonplace, reports of women becoming CEOs, police chiefs, and even president of the United States will cease to surprise us. Or perhaps we have already reached this point.

— Rosa Broderick, student

To make the conclusion memorable and to give a sense of comple- tion, you might include a detail, an example, a quotation, or a statistic from the introduction to bring readers full circle.

Whatever concluding strategy you choose, keep in mind that an effec- tive conclusion is decisive and unapologetic. Avoid introducing completely new ideas at the end of an essay. And because the conclusion is so closely tied to the rest of the essay, be prepared to rework it or replace it as you revise your draft.

In addition to echoing your main idea, a conclusion might do any of the following:

■■ Briefly summarize your essay’s key points ■■ Propose a course of action ■■ Offer a recommendation ■■ Discuss the topic’s wider significance or implications ■■ Redefine a key term or concept ■■ Pose a question for future study

Strategies for drafting a conclusion C2 Drafting > As you write: Revising a conclusion

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21Managing your files C2-d

C2-d Manage your files. Keeping track of all your notes, outlines, and drafts can be challenging. Be sure to give your files distinct names that reflect the appropriate stage of your writing process, and store them in a logical place. Apply- ing the following steps can help you explore drafting and revising pos- sibilities with little risk.

• Create folders and subfolders for each assignment. Save notes, outlines, and drafts together.

• Label revised drafts with different file names and dates.

• Print hard copies, make backup copies, and press the Save button often.

• Always record complete bibliographic information about any sources you might use, including visuals.

• Use a comment function to make notes to yourself or to respond to the drafts of peers.

YoshidaR English 101 Portfolio Address

Name ▲ Essay 1 – Literacy narrative Essay 2 – Argument paper Essay 3 – Ad analysis Essay 4 – Research paper Navajo art

C:\YoshidaR English 101 Portfolio


Name ▲ YoshidaR_AdAnalysis_Draft_10-13-13.docx YoshidaR_AdAnalysis_EqualExchAd.jpg YoshidaR_AdAnalysis_FINAL_10-28-13.docx YoshidaR_AdAnalysis_PeerResponse_10-18-13.docx YoshidaR_AdAnalysis_Revision1_10-20-13.docx

C:\YoshidaR English 101 Portfolio\Essay 3 – Ad analysis C2 Drafting > As you write: Managing your files

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22 C3 reviewing, revising, and editing

C3 reviewing, revising, and editing Revising is rarely a one-step process. Global matters — thesis, purpose, organization, content, and overall strategy — generally receive atten- tion first. Improvements in sentence structure, word choice, grammar, punctuation, and mechanics usually come later.

As you revise, reach out to instructors, classmates, and writing cen- ter tutors to help you review your draft to see what’s working and not working. Revising is a lot easier when you seek comments from review- ers who offer suggestions and insights. Simple questions such as “Do you understand my main idea?” and “Is my draft organized?” will help you see your draft through readers’ eyes. The checklist for global revision on page 29 may help you and your reviewers get started.

C3-a develop strategies for revising with comments. To revise is to re-see, and the comments you receive from your review- ers — instructors, peers, and writing center tutors — will help you re- see your draft from your readers’ point of view. As you write for college courses, find reviewers and seek their feedback. When you ask read- ers for their comments, revision becomes a social experience, connect- ing you with the questions and concerns of readers who help you shape your work in progress.

Sometimes the comments you’ll receive are written as shorthand commands — “Be specific!” — and sometimes as questions — “What is your main point?” Such comments don’t immediately show you how to revise, but they do identify places where global and sentence-level revisions can improve your draft. Sort through the comments you receive with your purpose and audience in mind. And don’t hesitate to ask your reviewers to explain their comments if you don’t under- stand them.

You may also want to keep a revising and editing log, a list of the global and sentence-level concerns that come up repeatedly in your reviewers’ comments. For instance, if you frequently receive comments such as “Develop more” or “Avoid run-on sentences,” you can use these comments to help you learn specific lessons and to transfer your learn- ing from one assignment to the next.

This section addresses common types of comments an instructor, a peer, or a tutor might offer and suggests specific strategies for revising. C3 Reviewing, revising, and editing > As you write: Using reviewers’ comments C3 Reviewing, revising, and editing > As you write: Being a peer reviewer C3 Reviewing, revising, and editing > Exercises: C3–1 and C3–2

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thE CoMMEnt: Narrow your introduction

siMiLAr CoMMEnts: Unfocused intro • Too broad

unDErstAnDing thE CoMMEnt When readers point out that your introduction needs to be “narrowed,” the comment often signals that the beginning sentences of your essay are not specific or focused.

strAtEgiEs For rEvising

• Reread your introduction and ask questions. Are the sentences leading to your thesis specific enough to engage readers and com- municate your purpose? Do these sentences lead logically to your thesis? Do they spark your readers’ curiosity and offer them a rea- son to continue reading? (see C2-a.)

• Try engaging readers with a “hook” in your introduction — a ques- tion, a quotation, or a vivid example. (see p. 16.)

thE CoMMEnt: Unclear thesis

siMiLAr CoMMEnts: Vague thesis • State your position • What is your main point?

unDErstAnDing thE CoMMEnt When readers point out that your thesis is unclear, the com- ment often signals that they have a hard time identifying your essay’s main point.

strAtEgiEs For rEvising

• Ask questions. What is the thesis, position, or main point of the draft? Can you support it with the available evidence? (see C1-c and MLA-1c.)

• Reread your entire draft. Because ideas develop as you write, you may find that your conclusion contains a clearer statement of your main point than does your working thesis. Or you may find your thesis elsewhere in your draft. (see C2-a and C2-c.)

• Try framing your thesis as an answer to a question you pose, the resolution of a problem you identify, or a position you take in a debate. And put your thesis to the “So what?” test: Why would a reader be interested in this thesis? (see C1-c.)

game exciting. Some fans even believe that rituals

necessary and that their actions in�uence the outcome

of a game. However, some fans go beyond cheering, and

their actions, verbal harassment, and chanted slurs

reveal a darker side of sports.

Narrow your


was most often left to the mother or other relatives.

However, today’s father drives to dance lessons,

coaches his child’s baseball team, hosts birthday

parties, and provides homework help. Do more

involved fathers help or hinder the development of

their children?

Unclear thesis

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thE CoMMEnt: Develop more

siMiLAr CoMMEnts: Undeveloped • Give examples • Explain

unDErstAnDing thE CoMMEnt When readers suggest that you “develop more,” the comment often signals that you stopped short of provid- ing a full and detailed discussion of your idea.

strAtEgiEs For rEvising

• Read your paragraph to a peer or a tutor and ask specific ques- tions. What’s missing? Do readers need more background infor- mation or examples to understand your point? Do they need more evidence to be convinced? Is it clear what point you’re making with your details? (see A4-d.)

• Keep your purpose in mind. Your assignment probably asks you to do more than summarize sources or list examples and evidence. Make sure you discuss the examples and illustrations you provide and analyze your evidence. (see A4-e.)

• Think about why your main point matters to your readers. Take another look at your points and support, and answer the “So what?” question. (see C1-c.)

thE CoMMEnt: Be specific

siMiLAr CoMMEnts: Need examples • Evidence?

unDErstAnDing thE CoMMEnt When readers say that you need to “be specific,” the comment often signals that you could strengthen your writing with additional details.

strAtEgiEs For rEvising

• Reread your topic sentence to understand the focus of the para- graph. (see C5-a.)

• Ask questions. Does the paragraph contain claims that need support? Have you provided evidence — specific examples, vivid details and illustrations, statistics and facts — to help readers understand your ideas and find them persuasive? (see A4-e.)

• Interpret your evidence. Remember that details and examples don’t speak for themselves. You’ll need to show readers how evi- dence supports your claims. (see A1-d and MLA-3c.)

him from his parents and his past (195). In his

desire to become educated, he removed himself

from his family and distanced himself from his

culture. In his essay “The Achievement of Desire,”

he admits regretting the separation from his family

Develop more

There are many cultural differences between the

United States and Italy. Italian citizens do not share

many of the same attitudes or values as American

citizens. Such differences make it hard for some

Italian students to feel comfortable coming to the

United States for extended periods of time, even

Be specificBe specific

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thE CoMMEnt: Consider opposing viewpoints

siMiLAr CoMMEnts: What about the other side? • Counterargument?

unDErstAnDing thE CoMMEnt When readers suggest that you “consider opposing view- points,” the comment often signals that you need to recognize and respond to possible objections to your argument.

strAtEgiEs For rEvising

• Read more to learn about the debates surrounding the topic. (see r1.)

• Ask questions. Are there other sides to the issue? Would a reason- able person offer an alternative explanation for the evidence or provide counterevidence? (see A3-c and A4-f.)

• Be open-minded. Although it might seem illogical to introduce opposing arguments, you’ll show your knowledge of the topic by recognizing that not everyone draws the same conclusion. (see A4-f and A4-g.)

• Introduce and counter objections with phrases like these: “Some readers might point out that . . .” or “Critics of this view argue that. . . .” (see A4-f.)

• Revise your thesis, if necessary, to account for other points of view.

thE CoMMEnt: Summarize less, analyze more

siMiLAr CoMMEnts: Too much summary • Show, don’t tell • Go deeper

unDErstAnDing thE CoMMEnt When readers point out that you need to include more analy- sis and less summary, the comment often signals that they are looking for your inter- pretation of the text.

strAtEgiEs For rEvising

• Reread your paragraph and highlight the sentences that sum- marize. Then, in a different color, highlight the sentences that contain your analysis. (Summary describes what the text says; analysis offers a judgment or an interpretation of the text.) (see A1-c and A1-d.)

drug testing leads to a hostile work environment

(128). In addition, researchers Shepard and Clifton

have found that compaines using drug-testing

programs are likelier to have lower productivity

levels than those that have not adopted such

Consider opposing


eight languages. Anzaldúa lists these languages

and then tells whichlanguages she speaks with

which people in her life. For example, she speaks

Tex-Mex with friends, Chicano Texas Spanish with her

mother, and working-class English at school (327).

Finaly, she talks about her experience with speaking

Summarize less,

analyze more

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• Reread the text (or passages of the text) that you are analyzing. Pay attention to how the language and structure of the text contribute to its meaning. (see A1-a.)

• Ask questions. What strategies does the author use, and how do those strategies help convey the author’s message? What insights about the text can you share with your readers? How can you deepen your readers’ understanding of the author’s main points? (see A1-a.)

thE CoMMEnt: More than one point in this paragraph

siMiLAr CoMMEnts: Unfocused • Lacks unity • Hard to follow

unDErstAnDing thE CoMMEnt When readers tell you that you have “more than one point in this paragraph,” the comment often signals that not all sentences in your paragraph support the topic sentence.

strAtEgiEs For rEvising

• Reread your paragraph and ask questions. What is the main point of the paragraph? Is there a topic sentence that signals to readers what to expect in the rest of the paragraph? Have you included sentences that perhaps belong elsewhere in your draft? (see C5-a.)

• Revisit your topic sentence. It should serve as an important sign- post for readers. Make sure that the wording of your topic sen- tence is precise and that you have enough evidence to support it in the paragraph. (see C5-a.)

thE CoMMEnt: Cite your sources

siMiLAr CoMMEnts: Source? • Whose words? • Document

unDErstAnDing thE CoMMEnt When readers point out that you need to “cite your sources,” the comment often signals that you need to acknowledge and give proper credit to the con- tributions of others.

strAtEgiEs For rEvising

• Reread your sentence and ask questions. Have you properly acknowledged all the contributions — words, ideas, facts, or

the governor’s proposal because he believes the social

costs are greater than the economic bene�ts. Many

people agree with the speaker. Most important, casino

gaming would provide jobs in areas of the state that

have suffered economically in recent years.

More than one point

in this paragraph

At the story’s end, Edna Pontellier is

described as a “naked . . . new-born creature”

who, in the act of ending her own life,

is experiencing a kind of rebirth.

Cite your


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visuals — that you use as evidence? Have you given credit to the sources you quote, summarize, or paraphrase? Have you made it clear to readers how to locate the source if they want to consult it? (see MLA-2, APA-2, and CMs-2.)

• Ask your instructor which documentation style you are required to use — MLA, APA, or CMS.

• Revise by including an in-text citation for any words, ideas, facts, or visuals that you used as evidence — and by including quota- tion marks around any language borrowed word-for-word from a source. (see MLA-2c, APA-2c and CMs-2c.)

• Review advice on citing sources. (see MLA-4, APA-4, and CMs-4.)

■ View yourself as a coach, not a judge. Work with the writer to identify the strengths and limitations of the draft.

■ Restate the writer’s thesis and main ideas. It helps the writer to know if you understand the main point of the essay.

■ Where possible, give specific compliments. Vague comments (“I liked your essay”) aren’t helpful. What has the writer done well?

■ Ask questions about passages that you find confusing or interesting. Doing so provides clues about where to clarify and develop the draft.

Guidelines for peer reviewers

■ Don’t take criticism personally. Your reader is responding to your essay, not to you.

■ Pay attention to ideas that contradict your own. Responding to readers’ objections instead of dismissing them may make your essay more persuasive.

■ Look for global, big-picture concerns. Focus on comments about thesis, organization, and evidence rather than commas and spelling.

■ Weigh feedback carefully; sort through the comments with your goals in mind.

■ Keep a revision and editing log to note the concerns that come up repeatedly in reviewers’ comments.

Guidelines for using reviewers’ comments

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C3-b Approach global revision in cycles. Revising is more effective when you approach it in cycles, rather than attempting to change everything all at once. Keep in mind these four common cycles of global revision: engage the audience, sharpen the focus, improve the organization, and strengthen the content.





Engaging the audience

Sometimes a rough draft needs an overhaul because it is directed at no particular audi- ence. A good question to ask yourself and your reviewers is the toughest question a reader might ask: “So what?” If your draft can’t pass the “So what?” test, you may need to rethink your entire approach.

Sharpening the focus

A clearly focused draft fixes readers’ attention on one central idea and does not stray from that idea. You can often sharpen the focus of a draft by clarifying the introduction (especially the thesis) and by deleting any text that is off the point.

Improving the organization

A draft is well organized when its major divisions are logical and easy to follow. To improve the organization of your draft, you may need to take one or more of the following actions: adding or sharpening topic sentences, moving blocks of text, and inserting headings.

Strengthening the content

In reviewing the content of a draft, first consider whether your argument is sound. Second, consider whether you should add or delete any text (sen- tences or paragraphs). If your purpose is to argue a point, consider how persuasively you have supported your point to an intelligent audience. If your purpose is to inform, be sure that you have presented your ideas clearly and with enough detail to meet your readers’ expectations.

MorE hELP in Your hAnDBook

Seeking and using feedback are critical steps in revising a college paper.

▶ Guidelines for peer reviewers: page 27

▶ Revising with comments: C3-a

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Purpose and audience

■ Does the draft address a question, a problem, or an issue that readers care about?

■ Is the draft appropriate for its audience? Does it account for the audience’s knowledge of and possible attitudes toward the subject?


■ Is the thesis clear? Is it prominently placed? ■ Does the thesis answer a reader’s “So what?” question? (See p. 11.) ■ If the draft has no thesis, do you have a good reason for omitting one?

Organization and paragraphing

■ Is each paragraph unified around a main point? ■ Does each paragraph support and develop the thesis? ■ Have you provided enough organizational cues for readers (such as

topic sentences or headings)? ■ Have you presented ideas in a logical order?

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